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The Phantom

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I don’t want to go – a shivering Tom pleaded. She was busy with her chores. When she turned, he wasn’t there. She walked up-to the front door. It was locked from inside. The phone buzzed.

Tom’s car had a crash and he was found dead, frozen in the lake, a few miles away from her place.

Written by Sangfroid

July 12, 2009 at 11:30 am

Posted in iWrite

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  1. Shocking !

    lostmermaid

    July 12, 2009 at 2:10 pm

  2. a spooky read.. liked it 🙂

    Kunal

    July 13, 2009 at 12:27 pm

  3. last kiss! – pearl jam!

    Ani

    July 14, 2009 at 1:36 am

  4. Ahh he came all the way in his nebulous form to talk to her and she didnt even see him.. how very sad 😦

    Winnie the Poohi

    July 17, 2009 at 12:35 am

  5. Indeed there is a similarity to my story “Last grip” although in my story, there are more encapsulated events that are needed to be unlocked other than the accident.

    This is a good start actually. However, it is better to make your reader see things and feel emotions and paint picture on their own. It would work better than telling them what had happened.

    Thank you for your votes to my story. All the best. 🙂

    Gleenn

    October 7, 2009 at 5:13 pm


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